I'm attempting to portray 'Fog' in these as both a physical thing, and an emotional (mental) disturbance.
Please tell me which, if any, you think best expresses those images, especially in a poetic sense...
perhaps none do, and that's okay too.
creeping fog ~ my memory ~ as I age
uncertainly
~ we watch the
~ fog fog
Stumble in the gloom ~ Lost in an ocean of fog ~ For eternity.
We watch as ~ The fog ~ Fogs
We see ~ The fog ~ Fog
Fog creeps ashore ~ Sensing ~ Internal fog.
Fog creeps ~ Creates ~ Fog
I like the fog creeps ashore one. They all make sense but in my eyes that's the best :)
ReplyDeleteThat's the most self-explanatory one, for sure. I think you're right!
DeleteI like poetry that comes to life if you get my meaning? That one does it for me :)
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